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This is the first proper song I've written. Here is the Guitar Pro file for the song as well so you can get an idea of how it fits together -> http://www.fileshack.us/get_file.php?id=657709&file=sandcastles.gp5

Crits for both the lyrics and music welcome, both are a work in progress so any suggestions would be awesome.

sandcastles

Sitting on the sunny shore
(and)
Basking in the sunny glow
Sitting on the sunny shore
(and)
Basking in the sunny glow

Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Putting up our defenses
Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Putting up our oh

Gimme three sticks and some sand bricks and I'll start again
Three sticks and some sand bricks and I'll start again

Sitting on the sunny shore
(and)
Basking in the sunny glow
Sitting on the sunny shore
(and)
Basking in the sunny glow

Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Firing at our defense-es
Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Firing at our oh

Gimme three sticks and some sand bricks and I'll start again
Three sticks and some sand bricks and I'll start again

Walking on the sunny shore
(and)
Fighting in the sunny glow
Screaming on the sunny shore
(and)
Fighting in the sunny glow

Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Breaking down our defense-es
Building our sand castle walls
(and)
Breaking down our own friendship