Just a random jam that me and my bud made, check it out. C4C.
It all makes sense
We're capable of beauty
Through sounds that make on cringe
The dogs only hear us now

Intro riff was cool, Later at bar 7-9 you go into this evil sound. Bar 10 is very generic and i wish you would of kept working on the riff at bar 7. Its alright jam but work on making your jams unique. Seems like you wrote this in like 10 mins witch is quite bad. But work on it and ill be sure to crit more of your work. Btw thnx for your crit :P:
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I didn't really like it, the first 6 bars sounded good. And it went downhill from there.