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XIX. Crushing the Soul of Men

The name of death bears witness \
unto humanity's last hope \
Ill spoken words lying distant \
from the actions they invoke. \
Verse 1
Centuries of Domination /
with and ethics dormant in deny /
malicious infatuation /
rights are held, seldom implied. /

What is it that one lives for \
when one serves without avail? \
to what masters does one implore Chorus 1
when a martyr is impaled? /

As filthy as this world might be \
one is extant without purpose \
bleed the blind with eyes to see \
embrace this life with feral aptness. \
Verse 2
There are no gods greater than humans /
the rights to worship are one's own /
no hierarchy for the common /
does but rend an empty throne. /

What is it that one lives for \
in servitude without avail? \
to what masters does one implore Chorus 2
when a martyr is impaled? /
I realized I was god when I prayed and saw that I was talking to myself.
#2
Quote by VengeanceIsMine
XIX. Crushing the Soul of Men

The name of death bears witness
unto humanity's last hope
Ill spoken words lying distant
from the actions they invoke.

I liked this first stanza, subtle imagery with very strong emotion.

Centuries of Domination
with and ethics dormant in deny
malicious infatuation
rights are held, seldom implied.

I liked this, grim outlook.

What is it that one lives for
when one serves without avail?
to what masters does one implore
when a martyr is impaled?

The rhyming scheme you used here works well, its hard to see but would be easy to see.

As filthy as this world might be
one is extant without purpose
bleed the blind with eyes to see
embrace this life with feral aptness.

I'm not sure about this, but if you feel it fits..

There are no gods greater than humans
the rights to worship are one's own
no hierarchy for the common
does but rend an empty throne.

I liked this, I dont agree with it but i did enjoy thinking about it.

What is it that one lives for
in servitude without avail?
to what masters does one implore
when a martyr is impaled?

Good amount of other lyrics before your chorus comes back in.


I liked it, could do with a little work but overall good stuff!

-Azza
Crit mine?
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Quote by MarchOfEternity
Oh, and azza, you're a pretty good writer! Graybass is a god amongst men and you're turning real quick to be his new messiah lol.

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You're doing good, mate.

Keep up the good work.

I'll take A for $500, Alex.