#1
Dry. Too dry a tongue as it caressed my
lower lips. I’d have left you alone if I’d
have known it would be an as awkward
encounter as this. Your hot breath is no match
for my burning ambition.

Like the virgin sip of vodka you disappoint.
To start with I was enticed, heard the stories,
thought you were a bit of alright, something
new. From across the room you certainly
looked fit for purpose.

I could imagine your complaints about
sand on the beach, itching between toes and
irritating your ear. Complaining, all brown-faced,
gorgeous, with wind swept hair and bikini-line.
You, cuteness defined.

Cute but sexy too. Overtly so, from the
light press of your hand onto my buttock,
to the sweet look in your eyes, eyes that
held me captive for the whole night,
From Wham to Grease.

But alone, you were sour, burning the throat
and pinching the heart, not my breath.
Your tan rubs off on to me, a dirt I need
to wash off in a vat of male sweat and semen.
You heard me, baby.


C4C
Last edited by Jammydude44 at May 19, 2008,
#2
Dry. Too dry a tongue as it caressed my
lower lips. I’d have left you alone if I’d
*lip
have known it would be an as awkward
encounter as this. Your hot breath is no match
feels like this needs But to open the sentence.
for my burning ambition.

Like the virgin sip of vodka you disappoint.
To start with I was enticed, heard the stories,
thought you were a bit of alright, something
new. From across the room you certainly
looked fit for purpose.

I could imagine your complaints about
sand on the beach, itching between toes and
irritating your ear. Complaining, all brown-faced,
gorgeous, with wind swept hair and bikini-line.
You, cuteness defined.

Cute but sexy too. Overtly so, from the
light press of your hand onto my buttock,
to the sweet look in your eyes, eyes that
held me captive for the whole night,
From Wham to Grease.

But alone, you were sour, burning the throat
and pinching the heart, not my breath.
that line didn't hit home with me.
Your tan suddenly seemed dirty, a dirt I needed
to wash off in a vat of male sweat and semen.
You heard me, baby.
wow. just ... wow.
at first i thought the last line was unnecessary.
but looking at it again, it feels like an appropriate way
to finish an inappropriate statement
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#3
well, i was about to pounce all over "cuteness defined" like a starved soul cannibal that's been posted outside the Pearly Gates to enforce the No-Trespassing signs....

...after further reading, i realized that the cliche-ness was completley appropriate.

i liked it. i read it couple of times, and i quite like it.
sorry for the nothing comment, i just really can't find the words to what could be said.
guess i'll probably be back a lil later.