Okay so i'm TRYING to compose some progressive metal/mathcore music similar to bands like The Human Abstract, Protest the Hero, and Between the Buried and me. But i have serious writers blockage all the time, and when i do come up with something i think is awesome at first, i end up hating how it sounds when i play/record it. I recorded this really short 14 second piece. I dont really like it to be honest. Tell me what you guys think about it. I'd really appreciate some tips, ideas, or anything that can help improve my composing.

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i actually think its got alot of potential but sounds a little generic but i deffinetely like it dont throw it away
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