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I just wrote this song 5 mins ago, and Im not sure if its good or not but Im pretty sure that its really cliche. Plz comment, even if you hate it, just tell me what I can do better next time.

Been stayin up, night after night
To write this stupid love song
But I can't get the words, just right
I can't let these words touch your ears until then
And you keep telling me, its alright
Anything you write will be good enough
But I just can't speak these words 'til they're perfect

And I've been trying so hard
I've been trying so long
But these puzzle pieces just don't fit
I've been writing all night
Been writing all day
The words to this stupid little love song

Sittin' in my desk during class
My mind drifts astray
And whenever I do
I just start thinking of you
And the feel of your tongue on my lips

And I've been trying so hard
I've been trying so long
But these puzzle pieces just don't fit
I've been thinking all night
Been thinking all day
The words to this stupid little love song

Even as I lay here, passed out and asleep
You're in my dreams, reminding me
Of why I write these words
And why I've had all of these sleepless nights
Trying to immortalize you in words
Cannot be done
But a feat that I will be 1st to accomplish

And I've been trying so damn hard
I've been trying so long
But these puzzle pieces finally fit
I've been writing all night
Been writing all day
The words to this stupid little love song

Its gonna sound kinda pop punky or pop emo, like June but the choruses will be like those of Five on the Five- The Raconteurs.