#1
As I lay down outside
The rain pours over my face
A thousand times I tried
To find love in this place

Times with you seem surreal
As I go down your road
Thinking of you I feel
Like my heart could explode

With you there will always be tomorrow
Even if today is filled with sorrow
Because you know how to stop the rain
That has caused my heart so much pain
With the end of every storm comes a rainbow
And with you there will always be tomorrow

I’ll give you every part of me
As long as we’re together
Because you’re my destiny
And I’ll be yours forever

All through the ups and downs
On this rollercoaster ride
Traveling at the speed of sound
Up until we collide

With you there will always be tomorrow
Even if today is filled with sorrow
Because you know how to stop the rain
That has caused my heart so much pain
With the end of every storm comes a rainbow
And with you there will always be tomorrow

Tonight as I stare up at the stars
I realize I was so blind to not find
That the brightest of all the stars
Was right in front of me the whole time

With you there will always be tomorrow
Even if today is filled with sorrow
Because you know how to stop the rain
That has caused my heart so much pain
With the end of every storm comes a rainbow
And with you there will always be tomorrow
#2
The rhyming seems forced and right before the last chours you ryhme stars with stars
the songs not that orignal either, its like all the other love songs out there "oh I love you so much dont leave me and I wont leave you" sorry if this seems harsh
#4
Nothing seems very original right from the very beginning with the refernce to rain, 3rd stanza(i guess the chorus): rain & the rainbow thing are all very un original. Then in the 5th "rollercoaster ride"...

I would give it a 2.2 out of 5 for originality just because there are some clever things. I like when you say "traveling at the speed of sound til we collide"

EDIT:Try to build off it and my advice is to try not rhyming and pick a word that makes it awkward to sing but sounds "cool" when you finally get through it.

Just an opinion BTW don't take it hard
Last edited by O-52-A-50-R at May 23, 2008,