#1
here's to when i still drank wine from a glass;
to the autumn air
and the apartment stairs
where you handed me my cat,
smiled
and said something in french.
i hated your smile,
you wore it like a raincoat.


he pulled the pen away,
gazed deeply into the cement stairs he sat on,
and angled it again toward the paper.

i miss you like a train,
i wish i would have been there.
#4
Quote by Arthur Curry
here's to when i still drank wine from a glass;
to the autumn air
and the apartment stairs
where you handed me my cat,
smiled
and said something in french.
i hated your smile,
you wore it like a raincoat.


Only line I didn't like was "i hated your smile" it just came across as bland, maybe that isn't the right word. But I think you can say what you want to say here in a more poetic way that would fit the piece better. Especially when the next line is really good.

he pulled the pen away,
gazed deeply into the cement stairs he sat on,
and angled it again toward the paper.

i miss you like a train,
i wish i would have been there.


Only criticism here is the last line "I wish I would have been there" didn't entirely make sense to me . Shouldn't it read "I wish I could have been there". But then again that might just be me not understanding what you're trying to say.

Overall I liked it, a nice short piece with vivid imagery.

Care to crit mine ?: The Road To Awe