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I just finished writing a short story for a reading I have to do tomorrow. The reading will begin with reading the receipt for the Rite Aid Cough Gels I bought, and using the bottle to hold daisies. The real story is that I had an extremely rough falling out with the friends I've had since I was a child, and I ended up taking 900mg of DXM, several shots of tequila, and a couple valium. Needless to say, I was seizing for the most part of the night and following day. Perhaps it was attempted suicide; I don't know. In any case, this is the story that came out of it (the final part is true; if you are in Michigan and watch Fox News, he was from Huron Township). I just wanted everyone's opinions on it, suggestions, and check for errors. Thanks.


I left my house to have a cigarette. Camel Turkish Gold, serial #1230026985. The questions and comments line could be reached at 1-800-334-8157. I thought about all of them. Rite Aid was only five minutes away.

It was store #04315 at 1378 Walton Boulevard. The coolness of the store struck me as soon as I walked in. It heated my hardened lungs. I walked along the rusted white shelves brimming with Pilot G2 pens, Mead composition notebooks, pizza-flavored Pringles, and Rite Aid-brand bleach. I found a bottle of rubies.

It was a white, 2 7/8” high bottle with a safety cap. Twenty count of little red bubbles, packed with dextromethorphan and absolutely no guaifenesin. I didn’t feel like projectile vomiting. It was 10:29pm and no one was around. I opened about two packages, opened the bottles, poked the small silver seal with my car key and emptied the bottles into my coat pocket. I should buy one bottle, I thought. They needed the money, anyways.

The girl behind the counter is about 18. She has red hair. I’ve always liked red hair. The eighteenth letter of the alphabet is R. She was at register #3. I gave her my money (transaction #2006023), paid in cash. I think her name was cashier #43151073. Forty-three minus fifteen minus ten is eighteen. Red hair.

Time of purchase is 10:32PM. It will be tomorrow by the time it kicks in. Nonsensical visions overtook me as I began to seize for a period of time.

At 8:20am, I recieved a phone call from my aunt while I ate Honey Bunches of Oats with freeze-dried peaches, containing nine essential vitamins and bearing a price tag of $3.15. She told me that my cousin Barney, age 18, had died.

As I stared at the Pfaltzgraff bowl with the floral print in pink, vermillion, and baby blue, I felt a trouble in my breathing. I’d call her back, I said. Then I asked for her phone number.


Also note that it is a short, short story. With this and the reading a several other pieces, I'm not worried about time.
Sincerely, Chad.
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I like it. A lot.

Sorry, not too much constructive to say, but I like the whole thing, the OCD thing is cool and really hits home. Nice stuff, keep it up!
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Thanks. I'm not diagnosed with OCD. I'm actually diagnosed with narcissistic personality disorder and autophobia. I was treated for the autophobia, but there's no real therapy for a personality disorder as severe as mine. One of my hobbies is collecting receipts and memorizing numbers comes easy for me.
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^ That's actually really cool. I love reading about stuff like that and talking to people with 'issues' like that. I don't really consider them issues at all, I consider them awesome quirks. I've got plenty of my own that go undiagnosed to this day. I'd get 'em diagnosed, but I think that would take the fun out of it!
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It was store #04315 at 1378 Walton Boulevard. The coolness of the store struck me as soon as a I walked in. It heated my hardened lungs. I walked along the rusted white shelves brimming with Pilot G2 pens, Mead composition notebooks, pizza-flavored Pringles, and Rite Aid-brand bleach. I found a bottle of rubies.


Is that an error? Anyway, I liked it a lot!
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Is that an error? Anyway, I liked it a lot!

Yes it is. Thank you. That's just what I was looking for.
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^ That's actually really cool. I love reading about stuff like that and talking to people with 'issues' like that. I don't really consider them issues at all, I consider them awesome quirks. I've got plenty of my own that go undiagnosed to this day. I'd get 'em diagnosed, but I think that would take the fun out of it!

They become an issue when you're increasingly hateful of the world and attack your friends emotionally and physically. Which is precisely what I did, which drove me to two genuine (I don't consider this one an actual attempt) attempts at suicide last week. This included holding onto electrical wires from my wall socket after pouring a cup of water on my head, and dousing myself in gasoline at a bonfire and having to be restrained from attempting to walk into the bonfire.

Edit: I blame most of my problems on my mother having played me Prokofiev's Capulets and Montagues while in the womb. If they were going to do that, they could've just constructed my crib to mimic the dream world of The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari.
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wow dude thats a really really interesting story i cant believe you notice so many things no one else in this world would ever care to notice like the way the letter R is 18th in the alphabet and then her cashier numbers subtracted = 18 which equaled red hair truely amazing man i'd love to hear more stories from you
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wow dude thats a really really interesting story i cant believe you notice so many things no one else in this world would ever care to notice like the way the letter R is 18th in the alphabet and then her cashier numbers subtracted = 18 which equaled red hair truely amazing man i'd love to hear more stories from you

Thanks. It's a fairly simple thing to do; just train yourself to look for certain things. I use it as an escape mechanism to distract me from the problems I have in my life. Same reason I use drugs.

And in case you were wondering, when I was jacked up on DXM, I distinctly remember John Hammond saying "Welcome to Jurassic Park" shortly before he reached into his nose and pulled out his skull, soaked in pus. Then Sasha Grey (the porn star) led me down a hallway where she inserted anal beads into her ass and pulled out her spinal cord. There were others, but the only get more disgusting from there on.

Edit: the problems I had last week consisted of my girlfriend sleeping with my best friend, my friends deciding that they hated me and ceasing to speak to me, and my cousin dying.
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