#1
I started just writing, and it poured out of me, but I can't seem to arrange it. I was going for a Sunny Day Real Estate/Cursive kind of thing. Can you help? Here are the lyrics. Feel free to pick out a chorus and stuff. I don't care. Do NOT criticize the writing, because I KNOW it's not great.

Here
In your arms
In my room
It's the only time i really feel a--
live, up on stage
Turn the page
It's just a day in the life of an average boy in love
All alone
I'm at home
thinking of you and all your friends
if I
could catch a break
Maybe I'd make this the best day of my life


You say
"you won't amount to shti"
I say, i'll stand on top of it all
Look up at me, you wait and see
which of us is the first to fall

back down, to earth, there's no more room for mirth
and we, transcend, there's no beginning to this end
but every end, has a start, a slap in the face and a knife in the heart
if i could give, you could take
but my kindness is yet to awake.
Maybe i just fake it
#2
Please read the rules and repost in the correct forum. That being the techniques sub-forum.

Reported for closing/moving.