thats really cool, reminds me of Pink Floyd. i think you should raise the level on it a few Db, a tad quiet... a cool melodic solo would be awesome in there

wanna listen to my song? its in my sig, thanks.
Yeah i liked it. Not sure if its a good thing but your vocals remind me of Billy Idol. I cant really fault the actual song, its really nice melow and melodic, but the recording quality is...well...its of an amature standard. And it hard to expect much more. I'm not sure if you used a click track but like the bits where everything stops and you come back in again loose their impact somewhat as they dont come back in at the same time. Props on you for doing as good a job as you did though. Just some ideas would be yeah use a click track, and some chilled, mellow drums would be cool . Hope that helped

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