#1
Crit4Crit


What is this place I can’t recall
This is not my home
It’s been a while since ive gone back
Where do I belong?

Times have changed since then
And everything was easier
‘Cause in a world of all this hate
It’s easy to get lost
Not easy to be found

Here I have no memories
I don’t know these streets
Towns I knew have all but changed
Am I to blame?

Times have changed since then
And everything was easier
‘Cause in a world of all this hate
It’s easy to get lost
Not easy to be found

Times have changed since then
And everything was easier
‘Cause in a world of all this crime
It’s easy to forget
What have I become?

Skies are different now
The heat is suffocating
Small town boy in big city world
Where nothing is the same

Times are different now
Troubles come along with age
Cause in the world I remember
It’s harder to frown
Much easier to smile

Times have changed since then
And everything was easier
‘Cause in a world of all this hate
It’s easy to get lost
Not easy to be found
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#2
It's pretty good. I like how you didn't use any rhyme scheme, although it's hard to know how it really flows without being able to hear how it's supposed to be sung. Also, I kind of think it's a tad bit bland. There aren't really any lyrics that stand out and are memorable if you know what I mean. Maybe try using some more colorful and descriptive words. I still think it's good, and good luck with it!

Mind giving some input on my last song? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=871984
#3
wow, thats pretty good dude.
i agree with ttreat. use more discriptive words.
remember. try using a thesaures when u need to get rid of a boring word