#1
yeah this is my song with a bit of help from 2 friends about child prostituion. er....hope you enjoy it

Little kid, walking down the street
Doing what she does is no small feat
It’s half past midnight and this kid is outside
Standing there with a “park & ride” sign

I pull up in my car, take a look around
At what I am about to pound
But I’m desperate; I haven’t had it for days
Who really cares if the sex is underage

Whoa ohhhh little children of the night
Whoa ohhhh little children of the night

I invite her in, make her feel at home
Making her ready to receive my big hard bone
Inside her, rushing in and out
I think she thinks I’ve finished but it’s time for one more bout

Little kids are way more fun
They’re more willing to take it up the bum
then, try not to make a sound
as give her a quick reach around

She just began to scream I think I’ve gone to far
I’m gonna pay then let her out the car
I can’t have the pigs knowing of this deed
Cause if I’m in jail then I’m gonna get beat

I pay the child prossie and speed off into the night
It’s time for me to go home and see my lovely wife
Bursting through the door and my wife says I’m late
She never puts out but with kids it’s on a plate

Whoah ohhhh little children of the night
Whoah ohhhh little children of the night
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#2
that was the most disturbing thing i've ever read. Are you a pedifile or something? Despite the topic it was a very good song. Very well written. I can't say nice job or keep up the good work, but it was very well written. Next time, write something that isn't perverted. Crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=873649 thx. I liked everything about the song except the topic. Keep up the good writing skills.
#3
haha thanks for comment, i'm not a paedophile or anything, i just like to write songs about dodgy topics. i'll crit your song in a moment, just working ona chord progression.
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#4
ok...it flowed pretty well.
expect for the subject... and to think im disturbed. that was VERY disturbing..
do you mind looking at mine and critisizing it?
its in my sig
#5
haha thanks for the reply, i'm starting to think maybe i should write songs so disturbing, i was intending for it to be a funny song but it seems the subjects too disturbing for anyone other than me to find it even vaguely amusing.
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#6
Oh, this is just sick.

This is the most insensitive, disgusting thing I've read on these boards.

Show some consideration. How can you even touch on something like this in such a nonchalant, ignorant way?

You can't take something like a child getting fucked against their will and make it funny.

-shakes head-
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#8
at least someone seems to have a sense of humour. i don't need self-righteous assholes telling me how i'm being incosiderate, i already know that, so just lighten up.

and i wrote it just because i can, i don't believe anything i've written is right or morally acceptable, and besides, it's just words.
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#9


Thanks for putting me in your sig. Whether it's for the wrong reasons or not.

I don't mind humour in songs... I just thing that this sort of thing should be kept off limits. Maybe it's just me. The idea of someone getting a laugh out of a kid getting raped makes me feel sick, but whatever.

I'd say each to their own, but I don't think that's quite apt here.
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#10
yeah fair enough, i know it's not to everyone's cup of tea, but there are some freaks who do find it amusing
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#11
Oh, this is just sick.

This is the most insensitive, disgusting thing I've read on these boards.

Show some consideration. How can you even touch on something like this in such a nonchalant, ignorant way?

You can't take something like a child getting fucked against their will and make it funny.

-shakes head-

first, does anyone see the irony in what he just said?
secondly, you CAN take something like child prostitution and make it funny. ever heard of a little band called Sublime? you just need to lighten up.
anyways, i thot it well written and kinda funny too. in a 'i laugh at a funeral' type way.
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#13
i think this song is very well written, but the topic just scares me a bit haha

i did get some laughs out of some of the lines though lol
#14
I really like it. Theres really not much else to add other than, I dont like the word "prossie", but thats all.

Also, since this song is kinda .... edgy I'll say, how do you think people would react to a song trashing religion?

But anyways, great song, very creative, keep up the good work!
#15
It was definitly well written, but kind of well twisted, but if thats what you were going for then I guess it's an excellent song.
#16
thanks for all the comments guys, and TakeThisLife, most people either laugh there arses off, or they fun for the hills haha. i think i've essentially created the musical version of marmite.

i should have some more songs up soon so hopefully you can have a look at them. if any of you have songs you'd like critting i'll be happy to
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#18
according to this song, yes, personally if i'm f*cked up then so are the creators of gore movies like Saw etc.
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#19
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according to this song, yes, personally if i'm f*cked up then so are the creators of gore movies like Saw etc.

yes they are
HiMyNameIsMatt
#20
then everything's cool

you're not a fan of me are you haha.
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#21
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then everything's cool

you're not a fan of me are you haha.



your writing is just a tad ****ed up, what am i supposed to say?
HiMyNameIsMatt
#22
haha i don't know really, good question you gave asked.
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