apologies for what i done to be banned. just messed up, i wasn't lying.

anyway crit would be appreciated since i'm going through a big hell of a writers block, cheers. (Poem not song)

The flow is a bit different, but I think it suits it.....maybe?

I counted

You smoked four cigarettes
As you gave out about me

To your best friend

And I wished that I could
Be invisible forever

And my body

A hologram made up
Of coffee and your perfume

Memories of me lying beside you

Are jolted by your fast speaking French.
Last edited by i_got_novacain at Jun 1, 2008,