#1
first try at writing a metal song, what you think?

Marvel from adrift,
Jealously set in,
Eating up inside,
Draining all your life,
Power to bring pain,
Pleasures what you gain,
Watching the whole while,
Behind that evil smile.

Lying through your teeth - causing all this grief,
Dreaming of what can be - through your words of misery,
Telling your tales to the wrong side, those who can’t abide,
You do this just for fun, you work can’t be un-done, done,
Your words are your gun, firing deception…
Why, why all these evil lies,
For someone whom you love…

Your like my parasite,
Draining all my life,
To give you strength again,
Like a bullet in my brain,
Bring me to my knees,
Just to spread your disease,
Your infecting all the rest,
Make it quick and … painless!

Lying through your teeth - causing all this grief,
Dreaming of what can be - through your words of misery,
Telling your tales to the wrong side, those who can’t abide,
You do this just for fun, you work can’t be un-done, done,
Your words are your gun, firing deception…
Why, why all these evil lies,
For someone who you love…

Now you think you’re believed,
By those you deceived,
But we’re the antidote,
To the ones you … choked,
Now they all hate you,
Guess who’s hunting who,

Now that you are through…
#3
yeah i guess it doesnt seem that metal, but when sang with deeper vocal/ shouts it kinda shouts machine heady to me. but thanks for the comment!