#1
My first real attempt at a song. Based on my life in the past few days. No title yet. Comments, critisism and suggestions/improvements welcomed. I cant garantee that i'll give one back, as im not too good in this field
boyandhisguitar@hotmail.com

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Open your eyes,
look deep within,
Search for the feeling that i could bring,

Theres plenty of time,
for us to grow,
so find that feeling and let it flow

<chorus>
Dont hold back,
Tell me how you feel,
let me know,
if this feeling is real,
keep me hooked,
on your smile,
Whilst I long for you,
All the while

Dont be shy,
dont back away,
you've got to face the music someday,

Theres a place,
that we can go,
and watch that feeling grow,

oh,

<chorus>
Dont hold back,
Tell me how you feel,
let me know,
if this feeling is real,
keep me hooked,
on your smile,
Whilst I long for you,
All the while
#2
Pretty good. Simple, yet heartfelt and earnest. A few of the rhymes are a bit cliche, but if its your first song, it'll get worked out.
#3
Kudos for your first song!
I really like these lines "Search for the feeling that i could bring" and "you've got to face the music someday" I guess I somewhat relate to them.

keep up the good work!