#1
V1
oh, its such a sad sad situation
this relationship,killed by a lack of communication
yes i was wrong,i know its my fault
but i still wanna be with you
if you'll have me again
oh theres nothing i woulnt do

V2
if only you missed me,as much as i miss you
then we might be able,able to start something new
please say that i wait in hope
cos i dont want to wait in vain
cos every second without you girl
to me is an eternity of pain

V3
im heartsick now,but they say time has a way of healing
i hope that its true,cos i just cant bare this empty feeling
can this really be our end?
our final time to part?
and leave me with a self-inflicted wound
tearful eyes and a scarred heart
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Tell me what nation on this earth, was not born of tragedy-Primordial
#2
is this a song or a poem? if it is a song then i'd suggest a chorus as this sounds like a pop-punk song cuz of it's simplicity it is a bit bland but alot of my songs are like that too so it's all good. But there is def. a good effort there and some more practice and you'll really shine. Good luck

Could you maybe take a look at my latest and tell me what you think? thanks
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=874504
#3
it just stops for the chorus and i say 'im still in love with you' while strumming Am G Em C Am on each wor respectively from 'still' on
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#4
I think it very simple, which isn't bad. It has potential, but I ain't a fan of love songs (cept for "Nothing Else Matters" by Metallica). I'd try to resolve it somewhere at the end.
#5
thanks for the advice
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Tell me what nation on this earth, was not born of tragedy-Primordial