#1
Hey guys first song I've ever written. Wasn't really sure how to go about it, so just wrote down whatever came to mind. Comes from experiences with women that I've had.
I've been playing the guitar for a while now and was wondering if anyone had any tips on how to go about applying some music to this, or just even saying how you go about it could help. Criticism welcome. It's called "You take the worst".

you just don't get the picture,
you miss the point,
get lost going in the wrong direction,
waiting for a helping hand,
that you passed along the way,

despite what your given,
you take the worst,
and expect the best,
its a choice you make,
and its time you waste.

you wont open your doors and let me in,
but these people break in all the time,
taking bits and pieces of a life once lived,
give me the key,
or leave me be.

you go back and forth,
hoping for a chance to be set free,
but never opening your eyes to see,
that your trapped in your own cage,
and you've thrown away the key.

despite what your given,
you take the worst,
and expect the best,
its a choice you make,
and its time you waste,
time you've lost.

the shadows cast by your doubt,
turn round and round as the days fly by,
but still you wait in a time that's passed,
not moving in the now,
but living in the then.

you've got to live your life while you've got it,
instead of hiding in that closet,
you've got to open up and grab a hold,
before your left alone in the cold.

the world has passed,
you took the worst,
with nothing left,
you stand alone.

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Thanks guys.
#2
There are a few places where the rhyming gets a little screwy, but I'm not gonna throw a hissy fit. As far as I'm concered this song is ****in' awesome.
#3
Lol ya I've never really been the best kid at creating rhymes or following specific structures for poetry but you know how it goes :P
Thanks