#1
finally finished it. its not really how i wanted it to turn out but all is well can it still came out good in the end. Tell me what you think all crits are welcome.
Attachments:
Metal song.zip
Guitars:
Ibanez UV777P
Ibanez RGD2127FX
Ibanez RG3120TW
Ibanez RGD7321
Ibanez RG6003FM
Ibanez SA160
Jackson Slatxmg3-7
Amps:
Baron Custom Amps K88
Rivera Knucklehead TRE
Fryette Sig: X
Randall RM4 /w Modded modules
Cabs:
Mesa 4x12
Bogner 4x12
Peavey 4x12(K85s)
#3
Haha nah my band is gonna cover it. But if you wanna record it and all that's cool just give me credit.
Guitars:
Ibanez UV777P
Ibanez RGD2127FX
Ibanez RG3120TW
Ibanez RGD7321
Ibanez RG6003FM
Ibanez SA160
Jackson Slatxmg3-7
Amps:
Baron Custom Amps K88
Rivera Knucklehead TRE
Fryette Sig: X
Randall RM4 /w Modded modules
Cabs:
Mesa 4x12
Bogner 4x12
Peavey 4x12(K85s)
#4
Every time the fourth measure of the main riff comes around it seem out of place. IMO [G]---9--7--10-- sounds better. Still I know how going out of key is fun.

I love 13-20, the riff is great. May I make a suggestion? Do it twice, on the second time go a octave up.

The 5/4 sounds off. I like the way the notes sound out though, its just awkward timing. Work on that part a bit.

The breakdown is pretty good, could use a little more variation.

Solo is great, so is the transition to the chorus thing. Maybe expand that part a bit more? Make it more breakdowny the last time through.

Oh my the lead part at the end. Gorgeous. I love this piece.
-Gear-
Mesa Triple Rectifier---Bogner/Line6 SpiderValve---Orange PPC 4x12

-Pedalboard/Rackmount-
Alesis MidiVerb4--BBE SonicMaximizer 442--Ibanez TS9
Boss DD-3--Morley Mark Tremonti Wah

-Guitars-
Ibanez ART-100
Ibanez S-470
#5
Well the reason most of it sounds out of key I know but really it's not its all based around the D# Augmented fifth scale. the suggestion about octaveing up on 13-20 was a good idea and i tried it and i like it a lot thanks for that =). I made the last bit of the chorus a little more breakdownish and it flows better into the next part better. Thanks for your crit and compliments though =).
Guitars:
Ibanez UV777P
Ibanez RGD2127FX
Ibanez RG3120TW
Ibanez RGD7321
Ibanez RG6003FM
Ibanez SA160
Jackson Slatxmg3-7
Amps:
Baron Custom Amps K88
Rivera Knucklehead TRE
Fryette Sig: X
Randall RM4 /w Modded modules
Cabs:
Mesa 4x12
Bogner 4x12
Peavey 4x12(K85s)
Last edited by kylendm at Jun 3, 2008,
#7
Pretty basic metalcore song. Reminded me of old Trivium.
Nothing too exciting except for measures 21-25. Overall, it was good.
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#8
Haha thanks it is a little basic but thats kinda how i intended it to be.
Guitars:
Ibanez UV777P
Ibanez RGD2127FX
Ibanez RG3120TW
Ibanez RGD7321
Ibanez RG6003FM
Ibanez SA160
Jackson Slatxmg3-7
Amps:
Baron Custom Amps K88
Rivera Knucklehead TRE
Fryette Sig: X
Randall RM4 /w Modded modules
Cabs:
Mesa 4x12
Bogner 4x12
Peavey 4x12(K85s)