#1
It doesn't have a name.
Btw, the whole "doo wap" thing is background singers.


When the lightning strikes,
And my feet touch down,

You run up to hold me
but I don't turn around

You wanna get feelin'
But don't wanna get hurt

That's like getting' muddy
Without the dirt

CHORUS:
So come on baby
(doo wap doo wap doo wap)
When the lightnin' strikes

Hold up your head
and get ready for the time of your life

If you're lookin' for love, then you chose it right
If you wanna spend time with the king of the night
Then WAIT
(pause)
Till the lightnin' strikes

so when you go down, to the ol' café
and you see those girls with their ol' "Hey, Hey!"

It makes you watch what you can't unsee
If you wanna get it on just look at meee

CHORUS:
So come on baby
(doo wap doo wap doo wap)
When the lightnin' strikes

Hold up your head
and get ready for the time of your life

If you're lookin' for love, then you chose it right
If you wanna spend time with the king of the night
Then WAIT
(pause)
Till the lightnin' strikes


Inspirado: Marvin Gaye
RIP, bro.


Anyways, I just wrote this for fun. It's not srs, and I'm gonna work on it for ****s and giggles. So just tell me how you like it.
#2
i dig this. I can see the whole R&B doo-wap thing. i like the ryhme scheme, but this verse is very weak:


so when you go down, to the ol' café
and you see those girls with their ol' "Hey, Hey!"
It makes you watch what you can't unsee
If you wanna get it on just look at meee

it sounds like its in there to just take up space and doesn't seem to flow well with the song. I'd suggest revising it or moving it so the ending is epic. but overall I like the whole vibe of this song. nice job bro
#3
Quote by BrettAndrews
It doesn't have a name.
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