#1
its friday evening, we're going out tonite
we're gonna feel real cool, we're gonna feel alright
that's me in the mirror, gel running through ma hair
im running real late, got no time to spare

*(chorus)
cuz the summer breaze is blowing,
its whistlin in my ears
the sun goes down and the lights go up
so mama dry yo tears
friday night delight
friday night delight

you look so fine, sofisticated look
u smileat me, i read u like a book
chris is here, and so is joe and dan,
they spot u here, they wanna be your man

*(chorus)
cuz the summer breaze is blowing,
its whistlin in my ears
the sun goes down and the lights go up
so mama dry yo tears
friday night delight
friday night delight
#2
i think that the song as a whole is a tad weak, especially the second verse. Maybe it just needs a bit more material. I don't really get the "so mama dry your tears" line. Why are there tears that need drying? But i really like the how the first two lines of the 1st verse flow. Real cool.
I'm a pianist and a poet,
and someday the world will know it
But until then all that I can do
is play my songs for you.

Wallflower says: Thank You! But my friend Odd is, well, feeling odd.
#4
It was good up until the chorus. I liked the imagery and the flow. But i thought everything after that was a bit bland. It just lost its richness that was there in the beginning. I, too, don't understand why there are tears that need drying, and that is an insanely cliche line to begin with. Try using more imagery and metaphor like in your first verse. This is a song that has pontential, but just hasn't reached it yet. Crit mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=14529103 thx.
#5
friday night delight

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its friday evening, we're going out tonite
we're gonna feel real cool, we're gonna feel alright
that's me in the mirror, gel running through ma hair
im running real late, got no time to spare

*(chorus)
cuz the summer breaze is blowing,
its whistlin in my ears
the sun goes down and the lights go up
so mama l;et me near
friday night delight
friday night delight

you look so fine, sofisticated look
u smile at me, i read u like a book
chris is here, and so is joe and dan,
they spot u here, they wanna be your man

*(chorus)
cuz the summer breaze is blowing,
its whistlin in my ears
the sun goes down and the lights go up
so mama let me near
friday night delight
friday night delight