#1
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Verse 1:

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Ignore me, and contradict yourself,
But when things go wrong...
You turn to me and give me,
All of the blame so...

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Chorus:

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Push me down,
Into the dirt,
'Cause where I can't breathe,
I can't hurt.
Push me down,
Ease my pain,
Stop these tears and set me free!

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Verse 2:

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You don't know,
What you are doing to me,
But let me give you a clue,
Before you make things worse,
And,

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Chorus:

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Push me down,
Into the dirt,
'Cause where I can't breathe,
I can't hurt.
Push me down,
Ease my pain,
Stop these tears and set me free!

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Solo
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Chorus:

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Push me down,
Into the dirt,
'Cause where I can't breathe,
I can't hurt.
Push me down,
Ease my pain,
Stop these tears and set me free!

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End of song. Thanks for reading!

Let me know what you think
#2
i thought that this song was ok but has the potential to become alot better
here are some of my suggestions:
verse1;try adding some rhymes, i had trouble finding the flow
chorus; very good, had lots of flow and very catchy
verse2;good until the forth line. i would say "before things get worse"instead.
ending chorus; good way to end.

what type of music were you going for(punk,metal,emo,rock,etc.)?
#3
Quote by oLiVeWaShErE
i thought that this song was ok but has the potential to become alot better
here are some of my suggestions:
verse1;try adding some rhymes, i had trouble finding the flow
chorus; very good, had lots of flow and very catchy
verse2;good until the forth line. i would say "before things get worse"instead.
ending chorus; good way to end.

what type of music were you going for(punk,metal,emo,rock,etc.)?


Hey thanks for your opinion

We're going for Alternative/Prog Rock, but this is one of our softer songs. I'll try to incorporate some of your ideas.