#1
I just thought of this stuff today and the other day
some feed back would be nice, and maybe some tips for comming up with more stuff. The chorus is a bit trashy I think. A new title sugestion would helpful as well, I think mine sucks.
(this is a re-post...in a way)


It’s in your blood it’s in your soul
It’s hardcore, kick-ass rock ‘n’ roll
It’ll rip you up and it’ll tear you down
You know you love that f*ckin’ sound
So raise your fist and bang your head
Beat your skull until you’re dead

The noise is raging through your brain
But just ignore that ringing pain
It gives you life, it makes you nuts
It cracks your spine and kicks your guts
Your head is dead, your mind is shot
Stomp your feet until you rot

[chorus]
Loud and fast, quick 'n' dirty
Need more to keep me steamin'
It's heavy metal to the death
As long as i keep breathin'

Now don't you run, don't you fight
Don't you fear that screaming bite
You're only gonna die ya know (emphasize "die" a bit)
So come right up and join the show
feel the heat, embrace the beat
Bask in the ever-lasting heat

It lifts your feet right off the ground
And slams your face back to the ground
(Needs more stuff)


Comments are welcome, along with any suggestions.
Thanks \m/
#3
i thought that was really good, and i don't really listen to the heavy metal music.
i didnt really notice alot of flaws but i would advoid using same word rhymes e.i. ground/ground.
but besides that it was good i'd like to see the finished verson of this.
You probably just have writers block. listening to new bands always cleared that up for me.