#1
You're the irony in my day
so please get out of my way
when things dont go to plan
you lift me up by taking my hand
and letting it go to watch me stumble
without you my world would crumble
without you my life would make sense
but i cant stop saying...

Chorus:
This is right, this is wrong in so many ways
Your words weigh the world
im struggling to linger on every one
you make my heart beat, but you want it to stop

Verse 2:
so bring on the heart attack
and dont think i wont fight back
fight guns with daggers and daggers with words
you are my armor, you are my curse
the only weakness that brings me down
so pick me up again
as i fall down and watch you grin
which is why im thinking

(chorus)


and thats all i got so far. im looking for a bridge/breakdown in which i leave the girl. because the title is about that. the left part isnt the direction left, its the past-tense verb left. so any lyrical advice on a bridge/breakdown would be great. also feedback would be great too. thanks.
#2
I didn't think of anything for the bridge but I did pick out some great lines, and ones you should work on.

fight guns with daggers and daggers with words
you are my armor, you are my curse - Was My Favorite Line

and letting it go to watch me stumble
without you my world would crumble - Kinda a cliche rymhe

The Chorus in general I'm not to fond of.
I had trouble following your thought.
Maybe just make it a bit more clear.

Overall it sounds pretty good though, I'd like to see that bridge
#3
thanks man. im glad you liked it for the most part. and yea, my thoughts are kinda scattered in the chorus. i'll try to work on it. thanks it means alot. i'll see if i can work around that cliche rhyme. and i'll just keep thinkin for the bridge.
#4
I like the song a lot, there are some good analogies.
I think the bridge should be about how like you get over her, and you walk out.
#6
i love the controversial-ness of the thing lol the irony is great. I wish i could do that. i honestly do. Sorry i dont really have any real criticism. im kind of a newbie when it comes to critiquing.

could you take a look please?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=15269751#post15269751

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace." - Jimi Hendrix