#1
ok so first lyrics i've posted in some time i hope to start recording riffs with lyrics some time this summer, well for now this is all i got its short but a start. crit would be great

Hatred From Within

I've hated you since day one
My anger only worsens
You pick me up, Just to let me down
And now i feel like S**t

Anyplace, Anytime, Anywhere

You'll feel my rage once more
This anger through the surface
This is my hatred from within

And when your so high and mighty
I'll piss on you and your empire
Picked me up just to let me down
And now death comes quick
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Last edited by Conor360 at Jun 5, 2008,
#2
Some cool lines here but not enough in it. Try and expand on some of the ideas and themes. Explain why you feel like hating someone. We don't know this person so we need to feel like we can relate to what your saying. Well I do anyway. Otherwise I just feel like its an insane guy rambling on about how the world screwed him over.

"And when your so high and mighty, I'll piss on you and your empire." I really like that line. Simple, but angry... the way I like it!
#3
thanks for the crit
Quote by Thrill-house
You like Lamb of God, so you're awesome.


Quote by Dopemgs

P.S: You like Lamb of God, so you're awesome


Quote by PsiGuy60
PS. To Conor:
You like Lamb of God, so you're awesome.
[/desperateattempttogetsigged]