It sounded nice, but you need to downplay the distortion and focus more on the melody of the song, other wise its all just dead noise, either that or find a little different tone that cuts through the mix. I really liked some of the chimes and ambient noises you had going on, they complemented the song nicely. overall pretty good.

could you give mine a look? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=877006 the songs on my profile, thank you