#1
Idk
But yeah
First post
In a acuostic guitar and piano band
Anyways
I guess I was trying to write a song about how life will get better if you have faith
Were not religious or anything but you know what I mean

So far the intro is

I feel like the man who knows he'll never see
The beautiful things
That god made for me
The beaches and sunsets
The birds and bees
The beautiful things
That god made for me

I feel like the boy trapped in his cage
Watching the other kids run and play
But he know one day he'll be set free
So he yells to sky
"god let me be!"

I feel like the tree
Dryed up and run down
No clouds circle me
No drops hit my ground
But he knows one day
He'll grow happily
He says, "I'll be the greenest
thing you've ever seen!"
#2
Also I wantedto add
Im pretty sure the ending will be

This was the day
That we all died
Let our spirits fly
Into the sky
The story of the man,
The boy, and the tree
This was the day
That god set us free. . .


Yeah something like that
Tell me what you think
#3
Decent. I think the tree part at the end of your first post was the best image. For some reason, I felt great sadness reading that...

...cuz yknow the tree ain't gonna grow.

And if someone is going to report him for a bump, the posts were only 4 minutes apart, so it's no biggie.
#5
Thanks .
Well I guess the meaning of it is like
The blind man can't obiously see, the boy is a handicap kid, and the tree gets no attention and caring for.
But they know when they die
They'll go to heaven, and everything will be better up there.something like that.
Lol
Were not a christian band
Wejust wanted to write happier stuff
Anyways
Anyway you think I can make it better. Ideas on what to add to it?
#6
Quote by danr123
Idk
I feel like the man who knows he'll never see
The beautiful things
That god made for me
The beaches and sunsets
The birds and bees
The beautiful things
That god made for me


You suddenly switched from 'he' to 'me' so you've actually written that 'he'll never see what God made for me'.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!