Poll: Sexy or sexier?
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First (Pronoun)
9 82%
Second (Two-Tone)
2 18%
Voters: 11.
#1
---Pronoun Verb Noun---

She snipped hair short and
stood it on end.
donning diagonal jail-bar tees,
she called herself an individual.

She MacGyvered two bras together;
push-up on the right, strapless on the left.
Dubbed it her Plebeian petticoat
and called herself a walking oxymoron.

She sang tuneless rhythms whilst
strumming poorly tuned guitars and
muttering about sadness and gloom.
She called herself a visionary.

She painted a teardrop on her cheek
and gasped at its beauty. Air rushed into
her lungs, "Oh no, If I keep breathing
I'll be just like everyon


[font="Garamond"][size="2"][U]Two-Tone Sketches For The Lost[/U]

Introverted progression,
harvesting the lack of distilled horrors
from this and that and back to the question,
that is depraved of an answer
even for those brave enough to be its explorers.

Extroverted conclusions,
setting standards I do not care to meet
the hopes and wonders and other illusions,
wandering across mindless bridges
while the broken chains scrape their feet.

         [I]like
Shifty
                eyes [/I] 
that shape our world with an unbreakable sensitivity,
striking down our stellar ideals like a supernova.

[I]Blind is the new black[/I]

Which means revolution for the artistic,
and hopes that we can bury
as the [I]condition[/I] becomes holistic,
despite the number
that call themselves visionaries.

Yet still:
[U]Calm, cool, and collected.[/U]
That’s how I see my side of this disposition,
after all the stars you’ve drawn and connected,
painting my fate
on the hands of ambition

[I]The aftermath?[/I]

Well, the portrait is to be blamed on the artist,
for no man can recreate the human complex
with mere watercolours and acrylics,
but simply display a hollow shell
that carries no significance to the plastered face
which in the whole scheme of things one could say,
is just the two dimensional cross-section of our mortality[/SIZE].[/FONT]
Last edited by Fate_of_Mind at Jun 8, 2008,
#2
Cannae choose . I will at some point, though they're both absolutely brilliant.

I preferred the first one with it ended on 'everyon...' or whatever it did.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#3
Quote by DigUpHerBones
Cannae choose . I will at some point, though they're both absolutely brilliant.

I preferred the first one with it ended on 'everyon...' or whatever it did.


yeah, my bad, I thought it was cut-off by the PM
#4
Aye, might want to check that's actually what it said because I'm not sure.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#5
The pieces matched up well.

First I feel goes weak in the second hal. Second whilst much more consistent started to seem too stylistic for the substance.

I actually thought about the vote for a good ten minutes. First.
#6
I still love them both, but I'm afraid I can't get past the fact that I really don't like the last line of the second one. Overall, I think I probably prefer the rest of it, but it feels completely let down by the last line, so I'm going for the first.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#8
My thoughts are thus:

The second one seems far too self-aware and pretentious. The first strophe of the first piece is lovely, but the form gets both tired and tiring.

Anyway, I voted for the first.
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#9
Quote by ZanasCross
bump + letting DigUpHerBones know that she didn't actually vote... she just said she did


Shhhh... people aren't meant to realise that I'm tired and crazy!
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#11
This is way more of a whitewash than it deserved to be...
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Last edited by Snowblind 911 at Jun 10, 2008,
#13
Well, now it's 8-2... if that's any consolation...?
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#17
Quote by ZanasCross
Eh, its not over yet. And truth be told, yours is a much more solid piece... it just sort of dragged toward the end. I owe you a few ass kickings anyways, you've gotten me twice.


fair enough. I'm just disappointed to be knocked out of top spot. I need to kick it up a notch.