#1
This is really different than what i usually do, I don't know if i can even put it to music.
Your guess is as good as mine as to what its about, i wrote it late at night

Have at it
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shadows dancing in my head
declare yourself friend of foe
holding on to my evey dream
find in you mercy to let go

where am i now
and when did you steal me away
forbidding my weary heart to rest
evermore in this cruel game we play

why torture me with awful visions
of a reality that only might be
make me insane with the untrue
and offer of yourself no apology
#2
Quote by corrylb19
This is really different than what i usually do, I don't know if i can even put it to music.
Your guess is as good as mine as to what its about, i wrote it late at night

Have at it
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shadows dancing in my head
declare yourself friend of foe
holding on to my evey dream
Omit "my"
find in you mercy to let go
A tad bit long.

where am i now
and when did you steal me away
forbidding my weary heart to rest
evermore in this cruel game we play
I think you should change line three to the same length as line one.

why torture me with awful visions
of a reality that only might be
make me insane with the untrue
and offer of yourself no apology
Omit "of yourself".


Flow was fairly good. I liked the subject and the imagery. It's been a subject I've been trying to wriite for a while now, and you nailed it. Screw you

Crit mine in my sig?