#2
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lol.

pretty cool man. keep it up.
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#4
I agree, cut back the length of the intro or add a more interesting lead part.

Clean up the tones, slightly cut back the gain of the backing guitar particularly, it does not need to be that distorted.

Throw in some drums and bass?

For a first recording it's a good effort though, and usually first recordings means the equipment is pretty low end, so that might be why i'm not so keen on the guitar sound. (my first were done with a singstar karaoke microphone!)

Otherwise, good work

Keep up and thanks for the Crit on mine!
Too much gain = Ears in pain