#1
This still is a working progress. I wrote this song last year about my best friend who had a bad night with her boyfriend. Please be honest!!

Change Me
She stares into space
The fear of leaving overwhelms her
A broken bond of trust
She sits there and starts
Reflecting on the way
How everyone cares

She says
No matter what may come
Now matter how many songs I hum
No matter where I rome
Nothing's going to change me

She remembers the day she confronted
Her friend on all the mess
She's aware of the trouble that has been occuring
Sorry is just a word to her
And she starts realizing
That friendship is the important thing
Last edited by Chevellefan77 at Jun 12, 2008,
#2
Change Me
She stares into space
The fear of leaving overwhelms her
A broken bond of trust
She sits there and starts
Reflecting on the way
How everyone cares
i dont see the connection between the lines, but thats probably because i dont know the exact sitituation that you speak of.

She says
No matter what may come
Now matter how many songs I hum
No matter where I rome
Nothing's going to change me
decent stanza, gets the point across, but still feeling a bit stiff.
She remembers the day she confronted
Her friend on all the mess
She's aware of the trouble that has been occuring
Sorry is just a word to her
And she starts realizing
That friendship is the important thing

sorry man, i would have stayed witht he original flow, because you went from stiff to sloppy. this was every where. it gets the point of view across, but loses all rhythm.

has its flaws, but an enjoyable read. crit mine? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=882738
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