Poll: Hello, my name is Paul.
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Green
9 60%
Blue
6 40%
Voters: 15.
#1
4 points

[color="DarkGreen"]16 Going On 6 Feet Under[I].:bridge, over damn:.[/I]

A silly clock is smirking in that doomsday sort of way,
    from beneath its gift-wrap cocoon the ticking trickles through;
5 minutes left (and just a guess)
--is the receipt in the box?
Iron lungs to blow out the candles, to make a wish,
to do this 365 step waltz yet again
[I]and one two three, one two three[/I]... It's time to race the music

Bathe, (the Auschwitz names on your arms will fade,
with the ink-clotted veins just praying not to forget)
    [I]Things to do today (again, forever): 
Make damn sure not to be forgotten.[/I]
Choke back the How Old Are You mimicries; 
    let’s sing a new song of satisfaction:


Rain, rain, go away
wake me up some other way.
Cloud-walls assert from the sky:
water cycles never die.
Just try to sing away the drops,
they'll be back, [I]they'll never stop[/I].
Still rolling, falling, just like you,
except they've got time to lose;
To fall, form, and rise again,
While you’ll die, goodbye, the end.


   and the old man is snoring.[/COLOR]


Cherish The Void

My comatose eyes drift away again,
sailing into a perplexed sunset
like a half-way house of sanctity
that I can half-call home.

As repose returns to comfort
the personification of chaos
in one smooth transition
from start to stun
bringing the relief of depletion
to a man whose days have begun
being measured in ohms.

But just as fast as a smile was cast
I return to a world of painful radiance
as though I were here all along,
hypnotized by the orb that has pulled a U-turn
counting down the day backwards yet again.

I wish that sleep wasn’t the only thing
that keeps me alive.
#2
Wow. Both are great.

First one for me though.
O! music: Click (Youtube)


^ Click to see an acoustic arrangement of Ke$ha's 'Your Love is my Drug' - everyone's favourite song.
#3
well this is properly dramatic.
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#9
Green appealed to me more.. But both of them made almost no sense to me regardless of how good I thought they were. lol
#10
Quote by Fate_of_Mind
NOTICE: This poll closes tomorrow morning at 8:00 a.m.; get your final votes in before then.

isn't the poll set to close Wednesday morning?

Makes no difference as far as I'm concerned, just making sure I'm not confused. Except that I am XD.
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#12
NOTICE: This poll closes tomorrow morning at 8:00 a.m.; get your final votes in before then.

I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#14
psh. I'm only winning by three. Last time a "notice" was posted the scores changed by 4 votes. Anything could happen.


Besides, you can always brush it off as beginner's luck :p
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.
#16
a rematch sounds just dandy. Perhaps next month, though--I'm almost full up on 1v1's for June.
I owe a ton of people critiques.

If you're one of them, please PM me.

I have trouble keeping track.