#1
Verse
I guess it's always the guys,
Who have to stare at the skys,
Pondering about her,
About what was and what were,
Not knowing how she feels,
Repeating the same lame drills,
What was she hinting at the park,
Once again left in the dark,

Chorus
I need you to,
Say I love you,
What is the deal,
I wanna know how you feel,
Stuck staring at,
These lame blank walls,
Just give me that,
One little phone call,

Verse
The hours we spent flirting,
The days that went by hurting,
Hinting should be a sin,
Wondering what could've been,
Another night alone,
Stuck staring at the phone,
Staring at the wall,
You said that you'd call,
I kept on the light,
I waited all night

Chorus

Bridge
If you want to take this further,
You have to make a move,
You have to take a step,

Was the time wasted worth her,
How do you get through,
I'll have to try, what the heck,

I'll let her go,
I'll move on,
I'll let her go,
Move on,

I need you to,
Please stop calling,
We are so through,
Sick of your stalling,
Don't want to hurt you,
But you suck, cough,
Sorry 'bout what you're going through,
But please just **** off,

I've let you go,
Move on,
I've let you go,
So move on,
I've let you go.
#2
Verse
I guess it's always the guys,
Who have to stare at the skys, *skies
Pondering about her,
About what was and what were,
if the rhythm can tolerate it in the fourth line,
you can get away with dropping about in both of them.
also in the fourth,
repeating what then changing to plural so you get were is kinda weak.
replacing it with who in the second instance will give it some variety,
if it doesn't wreck the meaning too much.

Not knowing how she feels,
Repeating the same lame drills,
the rhyme here is weak.
look for a stronger pair or just ignore rhyme for better content.

What was she hinting at the park,
Once again left in the dark,

Chorus
I need you to,
Say I love you,
What is the deal,
is comes off either formal or extremely pointed.
you can soften this by contraction, making it more conversational.

I wanna know how you feel,
Stuck staring at,
These lame blank walls,
describing the walls as lame is lame.
you can do better.
Just give me that,
One little phone call,

Verse
The hours we spent flirting,
The days that went by hurting,
Hinting should be a sin,
Wondering what could've been,
you introduce abuse, but don't do anything with it,
immediately moving on to wondering.
imho you should do more with it, or dump it completely.

Another night alone,
Stuck staring at the phone,
Staring at the wall,
Repetition of staring is poor during the read.
Starting both lines with it will force it to look intentional.
Fortunately, Stuck will work as a pickup note when sung.
Both instances of Staring can be on the downbeat.
Staring again in the following line until the call might be even more interesting.

You said that you'd call,
I kept on the light,
I waited all night

Chorus

Bridge
If you want to take this further,
You have to make a move,
You have to take a step,

Was the time wasted worth her,
How do you get through,
I'll have to try, what the heck,

I'll let her go,
I'll move on,
I'll let her go,
Move on,

I need you to,
Please stop calling,
We are so through,
Sick of your stalling,
Don't want to hurt you,
But you suck, cough,
Sorry 'bout what you're going through,
But please just **** off,

I've let you go,
Move on,
I've let you go,
So move on,
I've let you go.


The beginning of this was much better than from the bridge through the end, imho.
Meadows
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