#1
I posted this before and re-wrote it. the only thing thats the same in the sctual title line "From the top of the stairs looking down" . I'm still working with it. I'm not sure if this is a good point to call it done. I think it just needs touch-ups.

From the top of the stairs
Looking down at all the people
It seems so vain
All the love has been forgotten
How to feel how to heal
There’s no moral no ethics
No way to live in peace

From the top of the stairs looking down
From the top of the stairs looking down
I hope it’s just a dream
Like everything else I’ve seen
As I cry from the top of the stairs looking down

From the top of the stairs
Looking down at the world
I’ve see so many things
I wish I didn’t have to know
Everyone looks out for them selves
Then forsakes the rest
It’s my nightmare
I’m so alone
It saddens me to think there might be more like me

From the top of the stairs looking down
From the top of the stairs looking down
I hope it’s just a dream
Like everything else I’ve seen
As I cry from the top of the stairs looking down
Last edited by Gregoriose at Jun 14, 2008,
#2
I'm guessing you’re not getting to many responses because it’s a bit long. I'd say take the first and second verse out. Just add a new chorus and that makes a new song. Then take the other two verses and leave in this as just a two verse song. I think the first and fourth verse are a bit diffrent than the second and third. so try that.
#3
something like that? I get what you mean.

the other verses cosmic_wave was talking about:
From the top of the stairs
I saw how much you cared
Seeing you with him
Like I wasn’t there
The you I knew isn’t here
You’ll never come back I fear
You have no reason to forsake me
Some day I know you’ll see

You don’t have to be like the rest
Because words are repeated
It doesn’t make them true
What is assumed isn’t always how it is
If you really want to know
What’s going on around you
You know where to find me
I’m not that far