#1
How ’bout we go play in the cemetery
cause somehow I prefer the dead’s company.
Can you trace the moon across the sky with me?
Life’s not so bad, it’s not so bad you see.
Look up at the sky cause the night’s on fire.
Or close your eyes and listen to the cricket choir.
I’ll even sing that song that you always liked.
The one about the boy and the girl that died.
Later we’ll turn our music up way too loud
and just get lost in all the lights and sounds.
Then we can talk about the dreams we had.
See life’s not so bad, it’s really not so bad.
#2
Quote by Solemn Silence
How ’bout we go play in the cemetery
cause somehow I prefer the dead’s company.
Can you trace the moon across the sky with me?
Life’s not so bad, it’s not so bad you see.

i dont like the sound of the repetition in this line...perhaps change it?

Look up at the sky cause the night’s on fire.

i dont like this line at all...except for the rhyming of fire and choir...thats good

Or close your eyes and listen to the cricket choir.
I’ll even sing that song that you always liked.
The one about the boy and the girl that died.

I Will Follow You Into the Dark? i dont need to know...but im just wondering

Later we’ll turn our music up way too loud
and just get lost in all the lights and sounds.

i like these two lines a lot

Then we can talk about the dreams we had.
See life’s not so bad, it’s really not so bad.

not a very srtong ending...but good


overall a good piece with some minor issues...i enjoyed it