#1
Hey here's a little song i found, that i wrote years ago...

It's supposed to be an over the top, cliche, tongue in cheek, glam rock type song.

Ridiculous guitar solo, big hair, tight pants, that sort of thing. Like Van Halen mixed with The Darkness I reckon!

It's my first time posting lyrics here, (yup i'm a lyrical virgin) So tell me what you guys think!

~Cupid's Bullseye~

VERSE 1:

Girl you're drivin' me crazy,
My heart's about to explode.
Shot in the ass with Cupid's arrow,
And now he's gotta reload.

VERSE 2:

Oooh this feelin' I get from you,
So good it couldn't be wrong.
You look like you're my size girl,
Now could I try you on?

PRE CHORUS:

The way I lost myself deep in your eyes
No way I'm leavin here til I'm satisfied

CHORUS:

Make or break my heart girl
Don't play no games
Let me take you around the world
I'll get you screaming my name

VERSE 3:

Girl you've got me hypnotised,
With every move that you make.
If this ain't real and I'm dreamin,
Then I never wanna wake.

PRE CHORUS:

The way I lost myself deep in your eyes
No way I'm leavin here til I'm satisfied

CHORUS:

Make or break my heart girl
Don't play no games
Let me take you around the world
I'll get you screaming my name
Right now I'm Cupid's bullseye
And he shows no mercy
Let's get freaky babe, don't be shy
I know you can handle me


INSANELY OVER-THE-TOP GUITAR SOLO

CHORUS:

fin.
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#2
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Any tips, suggestions, comments?

I want some feedback!
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#3
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#4
Lol it's no Motley Cru but its alright dude!, I can imagine by mates band playing a song like this; they're called Nightmares Delight; bringing the 80's to the naughties ahaha.
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