#2
Sounds pretty good to me.

I think it'd sound better if the bass line did't just follow the guitar, and also if it was in the right tuning! The double notes on the bass don't sound too good either.

Bars 82 and 86 sound really out of key, and also, in the intro and outro, the guitar's playing:

D|---------------------------
A|---------------------------
F|---------------------------
C|---------------------------
G|--1-1-----1-1-1-1------
C|--1-1-----1-1-1-1------

While the bass is playing (assuming you change the tuning, which'd be wise):

F|---------------------------
C|---------------------------
G|--0-0-----0-0-0-0------
C|--0-0-----0-0-0-0------

Which isn't in key at all.

Fix that (it isn't too much really, I just wrote a lot), and it'll be good.
Last edited by TheWickerMan666 at Jun 16, 2008,