#1
A song I wrote about my feelings of the world.

CHORUS
Dreaming of blue skies, turn into blood.
As the angels cry.

VERSE 1
Bloodshed through the lands of the many.
Lives lost by their pitiful pennies.
World is swept by a brand new plague.
The New Age is the new Dark Age.

VERSE 2
Angels weep their tears of sorrow and sadness.
As the bodies fall to the cold ground.
This decaying soil is crumbling away.
A dream for hope has died today.


Format
CHORUS
VERSE 1
CHORUS
VERSE 2
CHORUS

simple
#2
i liked the imagery here, and the way you describe things.

for the first verse, maybe you could change that line to say "lives lost OVER pitiful pennies" to emphasize mans greed. if thats what youre going for, that is.

for the chorus, id suggest making it a little longer, because it seems really short. but then again, i dont know how its gonna sound, so it might work the way you do it.

the last two lines are really great, but the two before it that dont rhyme seem kind of awkward, because in your first verse the rhyme scheme was AABB, and in your second one its ABCC.

its late, so thats all i could really think of. hope this helps in some way.