That is a beautiful piece, but it is kind of short. It sounds great as it is, but it could use a little length. Good job, man.

It all makes sense
We're capable of beauty
Through sounds that make on cringe
The dogs only hear us now

I have to agree with spartan, it DOES sound great as it is, but it could definately be longer... i cant see any other area that you need improvement on. But, perhaps when/if you lengthen the track try and add a different part or two. Sorry i cant be of any more help to you.

Any chance you can listen to and crit mine? Inner beauty - link
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