to be brutally honest
your song was in poor taste and the overall sound was simply pathetic
Brother, I dig the guitar, but the vocals were mediocre and your screaming needs a lot of work. Listen to Alesana to get an idea
may I just add that this is only my opinion and that no offense was meant
I don't enjoy the genre personally so my opinion could very well have been biased
I only got an idea of what the song might sound like.. I think that if you manage to make a cleaner recording it might be actually good, but its really hard to tell as it is..