#1
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As The Fire Burns

An in tune note could not be sung
No oxygen could fill my lungs
The day our lives went up in flames
The days grew shorter we could tell
We never had a chance in hell
The day our lives went up in flames

& everything we ever learned
Was put to waste

As the fire burns
We'll take our turns
Reminding each other
This could be worse

I know that I will not forget
I single sight, a single scent
From the day our lives went up in flames
The rehearsed lines I would forget
The awkward silence turned me deaf
The day our lives went up in flames

& everything we ever learned
Was put to waste

As the fire burns
We'll take our turns
Reminding each other
This could be worse
Last edited by private at Jun 17, 2008,
#2
thats pretty damn good liked it a lot.
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#3
As the Fire Burns

An in tune note could not be sung
No oxygen could fill my lungs
The day our lives went up in flames
The days grew shorter we could tell
We never had a chance in hell
The day our lives went up in flames
I like this.. you kept the idea of "flames" throughout the stanza really well without sounding too over-the-top.

& everything we ever learned
Was put to waste
I like this part. Short and sweet, well stated.

As the fire burns
We'll take our turns
Reminding each other
This could be worse
This is good. Instead of sticking with the "we're screwed" kinda thing, you offered some hope to the situation.

I know that I will not forget
I single sight, a single scent
From the day our lives went up in flames
The rehearsed lines I would forget
The awkward silence turned me deaf
The day our lives went up in flames
I like this, especially the second half of it. It was worded well.

& everything we ever learned
Was put to waste

As the fire burns
We'll take our turns
Reminding each other
This could be worse

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For whatever reason, I'm feeling a "Welcome to Our New War" by Story of the Year vibe here. I'm most likely wrong, but good lyrics regardless. It flows well and seems like it'd be a good song. Are you recording it anytime soon?
#5
Is it about getting a sexual disease and giving it to your girl?

But whatever the meaning it were good and that. I thought it was gonna be a bit cliche when i glanced through but it wasn't when i read through.