#1
Take your bags and dont ask why you want us to stay this way.
With your eyes and your make up running more than I could ever try to tell.
I resent that you've made this to run me out of sight.
So your dreams and your fights will last more than my careless smile.
(I can live. I can fight and get less than this light-less fire.)

Catch your flight at night and wait for the time to make your last impression.
With a spade in hand.
Keep sitting in silence while I'm gasping for breath.
Will she ask me how this ends?

Try to find what you've lost but it's all inside your head.
If these thoughts make you leave I will count the hours you've spent with him.
Trade your pain for the sake and I've asked you my desires.
Like the time when i guessed I will race the stars you said were out.

I can't last forever while you sing these lines.
Cut your lies 'cause November's gone.
Cut your lines, this is set and done.
(I can't last forever while you sing these lines. )

There you stand with arms wide open and I can't seem to draw this map.
Frame your eyes with plastic wrap and let's call this one for us.
Catch your fire while you make me last it.
Nights that last with your bracelets matching.
#2
i really really like your style
some of those lines blew me away

over all not to bad
Reaching for the sun
one may forget
the feet which
ground him
#3
Take your bags and dont ask why you want us to stay this way.
With your eyes and your make up running more than I could ever try to tell.
I resent that you've made this to run me out of sight.
So your dreams and your fights will last more than my careless smile.
(I can live. I can fight and get less than this light-less fire.)
Wow, I really don't know what to say apart from amazing. Nothing is wrong with that stanza, nothing cliche'd or the like.

Catch your flight at night and wait for the time to make your last impression.
With a spade in hand.
Keep sitting in silence while I'm gasping for breath.
Will she ask me how this ends?
The first and last two lines are great. Especially the last two, really grips you and gives me an image of what's going on.
This stands out to me because It ruins the flow of it all. Doesn't feel like a seperate line, it feels like its the end of the first line or the beginning of the third line.



Try to find what you've lost but it's all inside your head.
If these thoughts make you leave I will count the hours you've spent with him.
Trade your pain for the sake and I've asked you my desires.
Like the time when i guessed I will race the stars you said were out.
This stanza is really emotional, now we're starting to see the big picture


I can't last forever while you sing these lines.
Cut your lies 'cause November's gone.
Cut your lines, this is set and done.
(I can't last forever while you sing these lines. )
Yet again, we're getting more and more of the story behind the words. That's what songs are meant to do. Well done


There you stand with arms wide open and I can't seem to draw this map.
Frame your eyes with plastic wrap and let's call this one for us.
Catch your fire while you make me last it.
Nights that last with your bracelets matching.
Great way to end it. I think though the last line should be 'matching bracelets' and not 'bracelets matching'. Doesn't seem right to me..



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