#1
tell me what you think

Trapped In The Present

Time is moving way too slow for me, how can it be?
Looking through an ice cube into my future my visions blury, I cannot see
Seconds passed are frozen over in the sea of time and space
Is this existence or is it what it seems to be I'm floating on the cards Queen King and Ace

Chorus
I'm trapped in the present, so is everybody else, its so so sad ya.
I'm trapped in the present, no matter how hard I try, I'm so so scared ya.

I can't comprehend my brain is not evolved enough its nature's way to ruin what shes made
She'll set fire to all the flowers in the land but in the end the greens will be okay
Safely hiding in a cave of weather where vicious winds sneak through the blood splattered walls
It doesn't matter cause that's how its supposed to be you won't feel fear even when you fall

extremely mataphorical see if you can figure it out
Last edited by Aaron321 at Jun 19, 2008,
#2
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*Reported*
"To be matter-of-fact about the world is to blunder into fantasy - and dull fantasy at that, as the real world is strange and wonderful." - Robert A. Heinlein
#3
I like the second one. Very good rhymes. Nice use of vocabulary, etc. More important, I like it. Sounds kinda kickass.

I like the metaphorical element too. Tho not sure wat the metaphor is.