#1
I recently posted a piece of the same title, but I was kind of unsure about it and it caused me to rewrite it...entirely. None of it is the same. Please tell me what you think.

Every time I close my eyes
And I know what you mean
Every time I lose my mind
And I know it's not me
Every day I look away
Cuz I don't want to see
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them

Every time I wish it true
And I know you'd agree
Every time I try to climb
And I know I can't flee
Every day just seems so grey
But I won't let it be
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them

And I know you're looking like it's empty
But I don't think that's much to guarantee
If we just let ourselves come around
Then maybe we don't have to be so bound

And I know you're looking like it's empty
But I don't think that's much to guarantee
If we just let ourselves come around
Then maybe we don't have to be so bound

Every time I think about it
And I know it's unseen
Every time I try to rhyme
It's like a disease
Every day is just the same
But then we are free
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them

[Repeat chorus until fade out]

C4C
#2
Quote by ttreat31
I recently posted a piece of the same title, but I was kind of unsure about it and it caused me to rewrite it...entirely. None of it is the same. Please tell me what you think.

Every time I close my eyes
And I know what you mean
Every time I lose my mind
And I know it's not me
That doesn't make sense... does it???

EDIT: I re-read it and it makes sense now, sorry

Every day I look away
Cuz I don't want to see
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them
I like that alot better but I don't know what lemonade dreams are.

Every time I wish it true
And I know you'd agree
Every time I try to climb
And I know I can't flee
Every day just seems so grey
But I won't let it be
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them
Everything makes sense here.

And I know you're looking like it's empty
But I don't think that's much to guarantee
If we just let ourselves come around
Then maybe we don't have to be so bound

And I know you're looking like it's empty
But I don't think that's much to guarantee
If we just let ourselves come around
Then maybe we don't have to be so bound
Good.

Every time I think about it
And I know it's unseen
Every time I try to rhyme
It's like a disease
I like that the best, but the rhythm seems like trouble, unless you've already got it worked out.
Every day is just the same
But then we are free
Cuz these are my lemonade dreams
And I need them

[Repeat chorus until fade out]

C4C



All together it's good but what are "Lemonade Dreams"?

I have nothing to crit so you can just crit a random person.