#1
a remake of a song i wrote awhile back, grungish kind of punkish sound to it
[verse 1]
Hatred is Happiness
its the only place i find bliss
euphoria is pain,
throw it away my life's a stain

you hate me,thats fine by me
solution is so simple
Yet, It all is unglued
[End Of Verse 1]

[Pre-Chorus]
twisted poppies, of memories
bring back my addictions
and past attractions, to you!

[End Of Pre-Chorus]

[Chorus]
Pages of a Black and white book
Life is black, white is emptiness
of my feeling for you
i love you, you hate me too
i cut it, and tried to paste it
Its All Unglued!
Elmer's Wont hold!
Hate me! if thats what you like
shred it up, hate it back together
like us
[End Chorus]

[Verse 2]
Love Me Again
Its Fun To Pretend
Play Games With My Head
Until I Surrend
Take Leave Of Me
Head No Warning
I Love You Life Is Boring
Fake Me! Play With Me!
Take Me! Hate With Me!
[End Of Verse 2]
#2
Quote by MetalmanOfDecen
a remake of a song i wrote awhile back, grungish kind of punkish sound to it
[verse 1]
Hatred is Happiness
the only place i find bliss
euphoria is pain,
throw away life's stain
your hatred it's fine with me
the solution is so simple
the pain has undone
[End Of Verse 1]

[Pre-Chorus]
twisted poppies, my memories
bring back my addictions
and past attractions, to you!

[End Of Pre-Chorus]

[Chorus]
Pages of a Black and white book
A black life and white pain
of my feeling for you
i cared for you, hate is strong
i cut it, and tried to paste it
Its All Unglued!
Elmer's Wont hold!
Hate me! if thats what you like
shred it up, hate it back together
like us
[End Chorus]

[Verse 2]
Love Me Again
Its Fun To Pretend
Play Games With My Head
Until I Surrend
Take Leave Of Me
Head No Warning
I Loved You
But Life Is Boring
Fake Me! Play With Me!
Take Me! Hate With Me!
[End Of Verse 2]


Alright, a few adjustments if you want.

To me, it doesn't really make sense. You're talking about hatred being great, then about loving a girl (Presumably...). Make it clear what you're singing about.

I like verse 2, I think taht you should repeat that a bit. Also, the start of the lyrics is important, I think that you should have something to do with the overall theme of the song rather than hatred.
#3
There's alot of usage of the same lyrics as Kurt Cobain. For instance the "i cut it, and tried to paste it", is almost identical to the lyrics in 'Spank Thru' from Nirvana.

Note: don't listen to music while you're writing lyrics, you're going to end up writing what you hear. If it's not the case then my mistake! Muhuhahaha