#1
Forget the life you once lived
forget the ones you loved
as bullets hit the sand
You must no longer hide


The battlefield will swallow you
and death is all around you
their blood rests in your hands
you must no longer hide


If blood ever ran cold..
If hell ever existed..


I shoulda ****ing known
Forget the lies you told


Go easy, it's a first try.
Last edited by Alkaline 64 at Jun 22, 2008,
#3
dull and unimaginative.work on being more descriptive and try and paint a picture with your words.this topic has been written about a lot and you dont do anything that hasnt been done before.find something unique to you and write about that.still,its your first try and everybody starts out like that

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