#1
Glory by: kevin dupuis


We ride on tonite
Shedding all the sunlight
Breaking all the evil that consumes us all

Training to believe
Fighting with the need
To fill the void of this passion filled hunger

We stand up together
Fighting forever
Knowing the consiquences of our failure
It won't break our spirit
We fight just to feel it
Banning together to see the glory

Victory is near now
Ever approaching the sundown
The enemies days are now numbered

Joy fills our land
We found our victory, took our stand
Now we live in peace filled harmony

We stood up together
We fought to live forever
We knew the consiquences of our failure
It didnt break our spirit
We fought just to feel it
Now we feel our well deserved glory
#2
Quote by wretchedspawn
Glory by: kevin dupuis


We ride on tonite
Shedding all the sunlight
Breaking all the evil that consumes us all
Three "all"s is a bit much - a little distracting. Dropping the first two improves the rhythm as I read it.

Training to believe
Fighting with the need
To fill the void of this passion filled hunger
Good short sharp rhythms in the first two lines that seem to suit the aggressive feel of the piece. The last line gets me scratchin my head though. If the hunger is filled with passion how is it a void that needs to be filled - it's filled with passion. There would also be no need to fight with.

We stand up together
Fighting forever
Knowing the consiquences of our failure
It won't break our spirit
We fight just to feel it
Banning together to see the glory
Again good strong rythym coming through and theme is consistent. Two spelling mistakes - ConsEquences in line three and BanDing together in the last line.

Victory is near now
Ever approaching the sundown
The enemies days are now numbered

Joy fills our land
We found our victory, took our stand
Now we live in peace filled harmony
The Rhythym is a bit harder to follow in the last two stanzas. It also is a war that is quickly resolved too quickly it's kind of an anti climax. Victory is near the enemy's days are numbered and then suddenly joy fills the land and peace reigns. I would like to have seen something more here that takes us from one part to the next.

We stood up together
We fought to live forever
We knew the consiquences of our failure
It didnt break our spirit
We fought just to feel it
Now we feel our well deserved glory
I like how you have brought this back (and with it that strong sense of rhythym) And also I like how you have made slight change in it to suit the new vision of peace and victory now present in the song.


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