#1
Well this is the first decent (in my opinion) song that I've written. If you crit it, I'll crit yours. Also, be sure to listen to the whole thing, it may surprise you...
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#2
Bar 1 made me lmao.

but overall that was an amazing track, i love how well it flows.
#3
The song's in a zip file

The intro made me laugh, quite a bit.

The riff at :33, along with the drumming was great. Then when it breaks into the slightly groovier part, I was stricken with the headbanging syndrome. The harmonizing wasn't necesarry, as the song would've kept my neck breaking at that point.

The clean solo had a few bad notes, but it made it sound a bit creepier. Sounded like a Pokemon song, actually -take note: I love the music on that game >>-

Overall - 8/10.
R.I.P. Charles Michael "Evil Chuck" Schuldiner
B. May 13 1967 - D. December 13 2001

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cuz ppl hate how power metal they are cuz they think its "gay" or w.e, which is immature and dirogitory
#4
Yea, I didn't feel like it felt dark enough so I had to take some notes out of scale and it gave it a weider feeling I think.
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#5
Yeah, but I was chuckling a little bit throughout the song...

You have to keep that intro.
R.I.P. Charles Michael "Evil Chuck" Schuldiner
B. May 13 1967 - D. December 13 2001

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cuz ppl hate how power metal they are cuz they think its "gay" or w.e, which is immature and dirogitory
#6
That was great, man. A lot od the riffs reminded me of the type of thing Meshuggah would do (No bad thing, they're an awesome band) and then clean solo sounded a little odd after all the heavy stuff, but it had the same atmosphere as the heavy parts, especially with the dissonant parts. The riff marked with the Metal marker was awesome, but I think that a lot of things in this song seem kinda disconnected from one another, but hell you wanted it prog/death song, and it's certainly progressing, lol. So overall I thought it was great, I'd give it an 8 or even a 9 out of 10.

And yes, bar 1 made me laugh.
#7
I added some more parts into the progression, makes it less boring I think, and added some touchups to mistakes. Here's the revised version.
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compilation.zip
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Yeah, I have fond memories as a child of fapping to a porno with my close friends before sitting down for a nice relaxing evening of Runescape.