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Hey!

So, this was a song that I started back in January. I spent a lot of time on the vocal melodies and guitar parts but I feel now is as good a time as any to post the lyrics. There's a few parts that I'm shaky about but, when sang, it flows very well. I added a lot of so's and yeah's to keep the rhythm going in the song too. Hopefully you guys will like it... <3

The Carolinas

So wrap it up, yeah,
because it's way past midnight.

And don't look back, yeah,
because there's nothing to see.

Hold her near, dear,
that's what she said to me.

So I don't know how to breathe.


And now it's gone, it's gone,
it's over my shoulder

And it's gone, gone,
it's into the sea

And I'm scared, scared,
scared for her heart now,

Cause' I was the best to be.


So yeah, we'll go with The Carolinas
and we'll, go with the rollin' green
and we'll, stay with, The Carolinas
until one of us finds a way,
to be.


So take your time, yeah,
because it goes way too fast.

And how the nights, fall,
the best that we ever had.

When all of me is in this,
and you're not around.

I'll wait for you,
without a sound.


And now it's gone, it's gone,
it's over my shoulder

And it's gone, gone,
it's into the sea

And I'm scared, scared,
scared for her heart now,

Cause' I was the best to be.


So yeah, we'll go with The Carolinas
and we'll, go with the rollin' green
and we'll, stay with, The Carolinas
until one of us finds a way,
to be.
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#2
While some rhymes were effortlessly edging to the bland/cliche area, the rhythhm and beat I found in this amused me somewhat, and I could feel the enthusiasm in the words.