#1
this song isnt finished yet...as you can tell havent spaced out the verses or added a chorus YET!!! but i will have one shortly if anyone is willing to help!!!


I ALWAYS THOUGHT OUR LOVE WOULD BE FOREVER

I GUESS NOT IM NOT GOOD ENOUGH FOR YOU

NOT GOOD ENOUGH FOR YOUR FREINDS OR YOUR FAMILY

I LIVED IN YOUR SHADOW BCUZ I LOVED YOU

NOW I THINK THAT LOVE IS JUST A WORD


USED TO BREAK HEARTS AND RIP YOUR LIFE APART

I HATE BEING HURT AND LEFT ALONE IN THE LIGHT

WITHOUT YOU BY MY SIDE I WONDER IF YOU THINK OF ME

OR WANT ME TO BE THE PERSON THAT YOU WANT ME TO BE

I TRY TO UNDERSTAND WHY THINGS HAPPEN LIKE THIS

I JUST GOTTA UNDERSTAND THAT THIS WAS GODS PLAN

FOR ME TO BE TURNED INTO A MAN

AND......

TRY AND FORGIVE FOR ALL THE BAD

AND WISH NOTHING EVER HAPPENED BAD

UNTIL IT HAPPENS TO ME I GET KNOCKED DOWN LIKE THE TWIN TOWERS

IT FEELS LIKE IM TAKING BABY STEPS AGAIN TO TRY AND GET WHAT I THINK THAT I DESERVE

BUT I GUESS IM NOT GOOD ENOUGH FOR YOUR HEART, YOUR FEELINGS,YOUR LOVE,OR YOU

LIKE A STOP SIGN ON THE CORNER I STAND ALONE

GETTING VANDALIZED BY PEOPLE I THOUGHT CARED FOR ME

AND EVEN THOUGH I TOLD YOU THAT YOU WAS MY HEART

YOU STILL RIPPED MY HEART APART

I THOUGHT LOVE WAS SUPPOSED TO MAKE YOU FEEL GOOD

LOVE JUSS MAKES MY HEART BREAK APART AND TURN INTO BLOOD

BAD BLOOD THAT RUNS THROUGH MY VEINS AND MAKES ME FEEL PAIN

YOUR NOT THE SAME PERSON I FELL IN LOVE WITH BUT YOU LOOK LIKE THE SAME PERSON I FELL IN LOVE WITH

SO I STAYED WITH YOU THROUGH EVERYTHING EVEN THROUGH THE BULLS***

I TRIED TO CLEAR MY EYES OF THE TEARS BUT

EVEN IF I DO THAT I STILL HEAR THE PAIN THROUGH MY EARS

I USED TO LOOK UP TO YOU LIKE SOMEBODY I COULD TRUST MY HEART AND MY LIFE WITH

NOW IT JUST FEELS LIKE MY HEART GOT THROWN IN THE DIRT AND S***

I THOUGHT YOU LOVED ME

IF YOU TRULY LOVED ME YOU WOULD RISK YOUR FRIENDS AND EVERYBODY JUST FOR ME

I LOST TONS OF FREINDS JUST GOING BACK TO YOU

BUT I GUESS IT WAS THE RIGHT THING TO DO

REASON WHY I DID IT ............................



BECAUSE I F***IN LOVE YOU


please use constructive crit if you are going to crit!
Last edited by williamdllr at Jun 27, 2008,
#2
These kind of lyrics have been done way too many times, and are basically a cliche now. I'd recommend trying to find other ways of writing these lyrics that will express your feelings, maybe a more metaphorical style. Right now, it just seems like your pissed of at your girlfriend and therefore as quickly as you could, wrote a rant down on paper instead of taking the time to write decent lyrics.
#3
thx... i wrote these a while back and i just found them and i figured i would post it and see what people thought of it...i wrote this about 2 years ago...i know what you mean about it seeming to be a cliche but when i wrote it nobody was writing stuff like this that i know of
#4
These types of lyrics have always been written. You can try using this maybe as a frame into creating a more, uh, 'mature' piece. I don't mean mature as in the subject but more of the writing style.